Beauty To Go
Reflection:
It was surprising to me how little feedback I received on my first pitch. I appreciated all of positive comments, but I did not receive much critique. One of my peers did say that I probably should include the specific services and our prices, so that was helpful. But other than that, I didn't have much to change. I felt that the critique that I did get was useful and important, so I am glad that I got it. I also noticed that the guys were the ones that didn't provide much or any critique because they noticed they were not in my "target audience." I adjusted this to expand our customer base and so men will more likely provide feedback.
What did I change?
First and foremost, I realized that men would benefit from this idea as well, so I included them in my target audience this time around. I also included Beauty To Go's specific services and how our prices will not be affected because we are mobile.